Inevitability
The Ripple of Sabotage…
Ocean-sized tears fall, slowly,
leaping in a calculated manner,
reaching like unsteady hands prior to bracing before dropping…
Asteroid-sized tears pouring, fast,
seeking the right to be noticed,
desiring validation,
while being drowned out by false laughter,
empty disagreeance and
excuses leading directly toward the destruction of paradise…
Life without her = death by separation
…if only she too could experience the sensation
caused by being able to accept the worth of
Love gone right…
Ocean-sized tears fall, slowly,
leaping in a calculated manner,
reaching like unsteady hands prior to bracing before dropping…
Asteroid-sized tears pouring, fast,
seeking the right to be noticed,
desiring validation,
while being drowned out by false laughter,
empty disagreeance and
excuses leading directly toward the destruction of paradise…
Life without her = death by separation
…if only she too could experience the sensation
caused by being able to accept the worth of
Love gone right…
posted by SLUMP FACADE at 11:51:00 AM
just to noticed, in need of validation...i know not exact words but that second passage speaks volumes.
What I love about poetry is the act of interpreting it. Nice piece. It leaves me wanting more.
"Life without her = death by separation"
man! that's a pretty powerful statement, even within poetry. wonder if someone has ever felt like this about me...?
"…if only she too could experience the sensation
caused by being able to accept the worth of
Love gone right…"
love gone right? shyt! i wonder how many of us would even recognize a "right" kind of love!?!? :-/
you are an amazing writer....vivid emotion...as the reader i can feel the pain in this piece....nice work slump.
I can roll with poetry like this anytime. Great job. I feel the passion in it.
deep and I love it. Every word.
i feel oddly connected to the words in this poem though i know they're of no direction to me. this piece speaks with a gargantuan tongue.
"Life without her = death by separation"
I know so many (men & female)who will die this death. (sigh)
Slump...this is such a great piece, just so sadly inspired.
Beautiful words for a beautiful person, spoken from the heart and far better than I could ever express :)
@ Slump
HaHa sitcom...yeah right, only one season then straight to cancellation
My life isn't that interesting BUT thank you for the compliment :)
I'll send in a "script" when you send in a manuscript for your poetry
I loved this....