100 Words "4" Self {Two}
Wife Account
His words cut through my existence like surgical steel,
expects me to heed to his will,
despite my own,
he has grown superficial in his quest to provide,
all love to the side,
I fear for him and his distorted view of success,
he is at greatest peace resting atop my breast after our bodies have meshed,
his whit keeps our marriage fresh, anew,
oft times I have not a clue who he is, bipolar,
at times he possesses the demeanor of an unaffectionate soldier,
detached,
however,
during those rare, precious, occurrences his is my perfect match,
I love him…
His words cut through my existence like surgical steel,
expects me to heed to his will,
despite my own,
he has grown superficial in his quest to provide,
all love to the side,
I fear for him and his distorted view of success,
he is at greatest peace resting atop my breast after our bodies have meshed,
his whit keeps our marriage fresh, anew,
oft times I have not a clue who he is, bipolar,
at times he possesses the demeanor of an unaffectionate soldier,
detached,
however,
during those rare, precious, occurrences his is my perfect match,
I love him…
posted by SLUMP FACADE at 8:10:00 AM
interesting pov's as usual. smile. i find it interesting how the mistress's words more matter of fact, very simple; yet, the wife's words seemed more poetic with depth.
@ shelle -- I thought the words of the mistress rang of desperation. Like she was making more of every little thing he did ... because he was all she had and he belonged to someone else. Just my take.
Great work!
This is very expressive! I like it. You have a beautiful way with words!
I'm still waiting for longer narative. I think you would be a natural at it. You are truly gifted.
you never cease to amaze me.... great write.
You need to give me a call so I can find out what's been going on for the last couple of weeks. I like...
DEEEEEEEEEEP!!
You know Slump- you just need to get out of my head! :)
Man I can relate to this all to well.
i relate a little too well to this one. i don't know whether to thank you or hit you. lol
"I fear for him and his distorted view of success,
he is at greatest peace resting atop my breast after our bodies have meshed,
his whit keeps our marriage fresh, anew,
oft times I have not a clue who he is, bipolar,"
very proud of the wordsmithing sir! this piece is nice.